REAL WORLD WRITING CASE # 3

THE CASE OF THE POORLY WRITTEN E-MAIL

Read the E-mail below:

Dear Ms. Wanless-Sobel,

my name is Jill Smith and I bring you good news we have the car  your looking for. I understand that buying a car is stressful and my job is too make sure you get all the help you need too make a informed choice. their are many options available for the  you wants and I want too be sure you tell me all the things your looking four. Please call me right away  at XXX.XXXX so than we can set up appointment. sincerely Jill Smith

So what is wrong with this E-mail?

Did you catch...

~~ the run-on sentences?

~~improper capitalization (lack of capitalization)?

~~lack of commas?

~~a verb not matching / agreeing with its antecedent?

~~the confusion between then and than?

~~the incorrect formatting for the signature?

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